--Elite Writer Alias: UnderlinedInRed Name: Miranda C ASL: 17/f/Beijing Website:[ Website ] Blog:[ Blog ] Days Away: 11 Life Story: Fear [ Ignore User ]
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yes i wrote it a few days ago. ha, it was a true story so i just put it on paper so i dont forget. and thank you very much. God teaches me and i try to show others, but it usually gets lost in translation somewhere. with love. kt.
I at least gave you contsructive points on "Youth",you know what you supposedly come on this site for?
Well you returned the favour with a dissapointed reply and about four of these crappy little two sentence long comments saying:
Uh...I guess its good,but you should tone down the imagery,your stuff is too confusing etc etc
Your writing is pretty much devoid of imagery,and when its there its awfull!
"tormet, regrets, and damaged swords"
"I hug it close,
My blankets tight,
Try to stop the shaking,
Try to stop the fight."
There was no explaination,just you looking to jump on anything you could to put me down on the same level as you.
If you actually read poetry in general and have a proper grasp of things (and I mean real poets,not whoever your pals are on this site),You would have been able to de-construct my writing proper,if you were well read you could probably tear it apart.
But your not,I just have to look at your work to make that assumption.
Its all ham-fisted emotional tripe,look at your feature sure,dont tell me thats not easy to knock...
So yes,I wont take what you said seriously because you really said nothing rellevent at all,you probably cant counter any of the points in those admittedly vicious comments I dished out either.
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