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Hey! I know it's been a while, but thank you so much for the comments on Lesson Learned. True story, my Dad had such a way putting things. And I don't know how, but he was always right and it always worked to his favor. I'm like you, I know it would back fire! Anyway, thanks again!
thanks for the feedback. it says "here in your arms" because we are going to be meetng again i a month. i did some sh!t that made it so i had to leave town but he's gonna meet me where i am. thanks for the comment. i like the revisions you made on my piece. i'll think about adding them.
Thank you so much for the comment on Rememberies, i wasnt sure if that one would really get much of a response, and you went and proved me wrong. thank you.
i read some of your work today and i honestly think you are a wonderful writer.
I will try to take some of your suggestions.
Thanks so much for the comment on my poem "If Teardrops Were Diamonds" - I really appreciate it, as well as your suggestions. I can't change infinite t 'untold' though, because I use 'untold' in the poem already in the next stanza, and I don't want to have it twice :) But thanks for the suggestion anyhow!
Thank you very much for your comment on "true love comes in a dream"...
I see exactly what you mean and actually,believe it or not,almost all of the poem used to rhyme,
but I changed it because someone told me the voice was conflicting with the words(you probably saw the comment below actually),
so I toned it all down(because I agreed and to be honest it sounded a little too hysterical),
so yeah,I kind of stripped it of a lot of the originals humor or quirkiness because it should be more of a tormented poem.
Its not finished yet however,Ill probably add some more back in,in a more reserved and solid form so thank you,your comment will be a big help to me...