Thank you for your comment on "The Most Sensible Lunatic".
It was meant like coffee house poetry... in a way. The first of that type that I've really tried. It's meant to be that crazy and a little indiscernible.
She is beauty... she is a sensible lunatic and a cruel saint... and she is the reason that I am a sensible lunatic and a cruel saint.
It takes a few reads to really understand... and, I understand that... but, I couldn't change it without hurting its intricacy.
It really sounds better when I orate it in that lingering, big breathed, passion stroked coffeehouse way, lol.
You should try orating it, if you care to... it might come together better that way. Perhaps, eh.
I admit it is a bit repetive. Thank you for the comment on the poem, you were right, it is about a drug addict. I agree with you as well, I believe this poem could have been a bit less confusing. I know my mind was not 100% capable of writing that day, but it is what it came out to be. One of the intrevals in my Regression Session. Keep in touch, welcome to ES.
It is on the subject of arrogance while itself an example of arrogance (and somewhat just playing with words). All tempered by my chronic insomnia (thus the lack of full coherence). I have no idea what to do with it. It's one of those things I like so much but should probably add to the nevermind pile. I think adding fluff would detract from it, but then that may be because I know what I'm saying and forgetting the reader doesn't live in my brain. I like reading things where I only pick up on bits and pieces though and end up writing things that aren't self-contained. That may be a flaw. Thank you for the comment. Always find what people think and feel about something helpful even if they're being negative, which you weren't. Another positive, you gave suggestions for improvement. Always appreciated.