hey i wanted to say that silvertwin is superbly written. how you went from prosetry in the human aspect to dry boxy statements for the computer was amazing. truly top notch. if you can keep up that dynamic you'd have something special. the rhythm carries the piece in a lovely way. good luck getting online critiques on anything that long anywhere. most of us skip over them. but i'm glad i read it. it was enjoyable. if you managed to tell a good story i would read it through. seemingly publishable (minus grammatical/syntaxual errors(only a few))
Thanks Micheal for April Showers,--especially for the Fave
I too have been struggling with the heinous "Block" Recently I have been making a determined effort to get back on track--it actually depresses me to have all these thoughts, feelings,experiences dammed up inside and not be able to find the words to express them--or the time, or the motivation except at weird hours when normal people are sleeping.
Thanks for the vote of confidence---It makes me happy that you felt the beauty and awe that I tried to convey.