--Elite Writer Alias: black_beauty18 Name: Melissa VanWey ASL: 25/Female/Hutchinson, KS Website:[ Education ] Days Away: 83 Life Story: Never good enough. [ Ignore User ]
Favorites: 15 Forum Posts: 26 Shoutbox Posts: 1 RP Posts: 0 Signup Date: 4805 D 13.16 Years 1.32 Decades 160.17 Months 686.43 Weeks 4.805000e+8 Heart Beats -There you go eggman Quote: We accept the love we think we deserve.
Thank you Melissa, for the comments on my two poems. I'm really bad at putting punctuation in my poems actually. i just don't care that much. I just write as a release and normally its all done in haste. I don't edit my poems beyond that first initial write so if punctuation isn't placed when i write it, it probably won't be placed ever. haha. But i know what you mean, if i had put some in it would be a better flow and a better meaning. haha. So thanks! I'll try to work on that... but its not a big concern of mine. Though I know it irritates some people.
And as for Lost Little Girl... I guess that poem wasn't about the changes she made, it was about finding the courage to make those changes. to know that it was ok to do what she needed to do. to know that its ok to break his hold over her. to change, mostly... from that Little Girl to that young woman she was already becoming. I get what you're saying though. Positive writing is not really my thing. Though. Just so you know.
I'm probably sounding horribly rude... and please trust me when I say that is not my intention. I'm very grateful for your thoughts on my writing. I love when people read and give feedback. So, again thank you!!!!
Thanks for your critique on my Immortal Love poem...yeah I'm not feeling the "thee" myself so I'll see if I can change it somehow. Glad that you liked it though I'm always happy when someone is moved by my writings :)
Also on the Aufrey Hepburn one I'll come up with more...I wouldn't mind writing more on the best actress ever!