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Well all I can say is I see a lot of anger in this. Maybe when you have more time to delve in to what he really did to you then you pick out a line or two and work on them. I can connect with it and see how angry you are but I think it could have a lot more depth if you worked on a specific part, made it authentic. Color it with pain instead of yelling it.
Anyway hope you feel better soon. Remember its not always just what he did to you, much of it is how you percieve it.
Yes, it was harsh. But no. I never wanted to give away anything that would give too much about our own personal lives.
It's too specific. *sigh*
A better version of the poem, with formatting is on the new site on my profile.
Titled 'The [censored]'
I see what you mean though. It does need a bit of work. But like all my other work, I'm afraid to change it, for fear of it losing it's... Hmm... I can't explain. I'm very critical of my work. And when I tweak things, they often get messed up. Even then, I'm not yet sure where it needs tweaking yet. We'll have to wait and see.
Thank you for commenting. :) I'll work on it when I have the time and patience.