You got that right on the ball man, I lost my flow after that first half, hence why I named it not done, lol. Thanks so much for the comment, It's not very often I get feedback. I'll work on it a little more when the time is right if you know what i mean, lol. Take it easy.
I very much appreciate you taking the time to read the chapters I've posted and give me your advice. I won't be working through the full blown edit for another two weeks, but thank you so much for offering something to think about.