--Elite Writer Alias: comradenessie Name: Vanessa Whiteley ASL: F Website:[ Education ] Days Away: 4494 Life Story: Was that it? [ Ignore User ]
Favorites: 41 Forum Posts: 1 Shoutbox Posts: 0 RP Posts: 0 Signup Date: 5779 D 15.83 Years 1.58 Decades 192.63 Months 825.57 Weeks 5.779000e+8 Heart Beats -There you go eggman Quote: What matters is not the faith, no matter how secure, no matter how sincere. What matters is the reality, no matter how open the question. Lost Sheep
yep, Sel is spot on! i'm actually taking english lit and philosophy, which means i'll get the chance to do modules in creative writing, but also explore lots of other exciting topics. i'm pretty excited just writing about it...
Thanks for the suggestions. I might make a few very minor tweakings, but overall I have everything as is purposely. The change in tense, the use of 'ing' (which I harness much like an alliteration), et cetera. For instance, taking out 'weeping' from the willow line totally detracts from the point I was making, which is that the forest is sad. Also, I detest breaking poems up into stanzas that are that short because I don't like to interrupt the single flowing idea throughout the poem. I only separate into stanzas if I am creating a repetition or breaking into a new idea.