Hey I was glad to take the time to read it, my friend. It was an excellent piece and I totally understand what you mean, true art just flows out of you and it's hard to control. Sometimes we need someone on the outside looking in to give us the structure/criticism the piece needs to become truly great. I have had decent pieces that have turned to gold because of others' input. The format I restructured the piece with comes from my love of music, the spacing adds a bit more depth and pronounces the heavy hitters of the lines. Kind of like a beat. Badadada dadada dada... da! Anyways, keep churning out those thoughts/feelings, I love to read em!