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Name: Caleb Hines
ASL: 21 M U.S. of A
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Life Story: EDUCATION!
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"They say if you play a Microsoft CD backwards, it plays Satanic messages. That's nothing, because if you play it forwards, it installs Windows." --Azuire


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Mood: ...bloody heck, my head hurts...
  
and a hundred broken corpses walk
upon the fields of grey
searching for the water's edge
to wash their lives away

first comes the task of standing up
in lines two bodies deep
and then the hollow (reasoned) task
of marching in their sleep

and each of several monuments
for these, the nameless, sway
a hundred broken corpses
drown in a quiet bay.


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LOL. About growing old.
| Posted on 2008-02-15 09:28:09 | by Maverique - [ Reply to This ] -
  
Thanks for the suggestions, i'll fix it up, ^_^
| Posted on 2007-11-30 17:56:29 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY - [ Reply to This ] -
  
Hey there,

Thanks a lot for the obviously well thought out and helpful insights on my piece "Erasable Colours" You were right on most of the things you said. I did iron it out and I was wondering, if you don't mind my asking so, to have a look at it. You said something about my having misplaced a sentence and wanted to know if you had any further suggestions on that account. The lines in question were the following:

As the sun does
But is instantly,
and rather consciously,
Washed away
As one passes by.


Now it read:

"As the sun does
But is instantly
and consciously
Washed away
As one passes by"


Is it ok? Does it still sound awkward?


Thanks again,


Ethan
| Posted on 2007-11-10 12:25:38 | by Ethan Brody - [ Reply to This ] -
  
Thank you for the wonderfully well thought out analyzation of my poem. That's the first time anybody has been so straight-forward on my writing. I feel that this type of reviewing is necessary for growth. You left some very good points that will help me improve this poem and my future poems.
| Posted on 2007-11-07 14:02:08 | by Indelible_ink - [ Reply to This ] -
  
I'm not sure if I should laugh or cry that you counted it down to the day. I think it's cool though, that you didn't forget about me. And thanks.

xoxo
| Posted on 2007-11-07 13:53:31 | by blu_kittin - [ Reply to This ] -
  
Actually, I lost my mind years ago as well. But now I've lost even more of it.
| Posted on 2007-11-05 19:05:39 | by AsiaticFox - [ Reply to This ] -



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