--Elite Writer Alias: dancer-of-words Name: Evren ASL: 21/trans/US Bio: [ Quick Bio ] Website:[ Website ] Days Away: 537 Life Story: [ Ignore User ]
Favorites: 21 Forum Posts: 1 Shoutbox Posts: 0 RP Posts: 0 Signup Date: 4897 D 13.42 Years 1.34 Decades 163.23 Months 699.57 Weeks 4.897000e+8 Heart Beats -There you go eggman Quote: You can't be lonely when there's no one around.
So sad to see that all the greats that I once could traverse their thoughts and emotions so expertly crafted into words, have now left and most have taken their works with them. I cry.
Hi! Thanks for your comment on 'Two Abodes.' Really it is the culmination of things that have been brewing in my mind for some time, inspired in part by a book called 'Writing the Life Poetic' by Sage Cohen. In one exercise, she asks you to imagine where fear lives.
I have begun in a way to understand that fear is as much an enemy of love as hate. Maybe more, because hate is often an emotion of action, where fear results in stagnation and inaction.
At the end of the poem, I could have gone on fr a long time about the things you can look to in order to find your happy place. Perhaps I could add another clause or two. By using the word "there" I had envisioned something like panning with a camera, or focusing binoculars. You are in this dark place and trying to focus the light. Almost there, almost there, ah! There :)
My poem was poetry not prose, free-verse to be exact. For instance a sonnet is written in iambic penatmeter, but I am not going to say to you of your sonnet, this is not a sonnet. Aside from matters of classifcation, thank you for the comment, the feedback on the rhythm of words is helpful and I will keep a look out over the things you pointed out. Cheers.
I only have to make it once every three and a half months. He's a bengal (20% asian leopard cat), as an exotic he really appreciates the meat. Every time I read one of your kitty poems it gives me a warm fuzzy, I just love my cat!
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