--Elite Writer Alias: dancer-of-words Name: Katriana K. ASL: female Bio: [ Quick Bio ] Website:[ Website ] Days Away: 1 Life Story: see above info [ Ignore User ]
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Dancer,
I love writing the guess what poems. Every persons guess is different and I love reading what thoughts the words provoke. It's really odd but this sprung into my head while looking across the street at my neighbor's lamp post. It has three round globes hanging from it and I thought that would make an interesting write. I really don't know myself what the orbs represent but your guess is probably closest. I have a hard time talking about my feelings so they come out in my writing or get trapped inside. Thanks again for reading.
Dancer,
I'm glad you liked 'Fairies', again sorry about the tragedies. I guess I just relate them to real life. Always expect the worst so your surprises are all good ones. I appreciate the suggestions about readability. I plan to make a book of all my stuff at some point in time. I don't see it making me any money I just want it for myself. Anyway, thanks again for reading.
"Is the poem about a person who fell?," well, yes and no. what I had in mind when I started writing was a very descriptive poem about a beautiful fictitious woman, but as you have read my imagination flung her off a cliff. I don't know why it just turned out that way.
"I couldn't decide whether you were describing the creatures blood or if it had red hair," well as to that, it is blood on the rocks. Yes it's incredibly morbid, but for some reason I find it funny. I guess it's the gravy reference. Sick and twisted huh? Sorry about the queasiness.
Anyway thanks for the comments, I'm awful with punctuation so I'll probably take your advice. Glad you liked it.
I think limiting each stanza to just two lines would damage the sound of the poem more than help. Moreover, I hate the look of poems made entirely of couplets. Personal preference, really.
The reason I separated the stanzas how I did: qualitative division. The first stanza is the action. The second is the solid objects. The third is the abstract. The fourth is warmth. The last two lines are affirmation of action.
But I am not happy with the jump from mountainside to musculature. It's more awkward than I intended...
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