--Elite Writer Alias: distortedcloud Name: Rakeem Haizel ASL: 25/M/London Website:[ Website ] Blog:[ Blog ] Days Away: 503 Life Story: failing artist [ Ignore User ]
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I hate when I get locked out of my site...grr
I hope you can recover any work. I'll get back for a second read and a video watch soon. I could not get it to pull up the day I read due to server problems from the provider. Overtime is kicking my rear right now, but I will get back. I have one person ahead of you in reads when I get back.
Welcome to the site. I hope you enjoy the interaction here. There are more active sites, but the critique here is way more helpful than most. It's always better to get comments that help you grow than a "great write" that tells you basically nothing.
Honestly you are so right about my piece Holes...I suppose the reason it felt so unfinished is because it still is...I'm writing to clean it out and I can appreciate enough you felt what I was saying. Maybe I can find out how to make this be "completed" and when I do it will be posted:)
the longing heart, for an unwanted answer to shed light on an existence unexplainable and painfully short imbued with a quest of discovery of self governed by a civilisation that rejects individualism on a macro scale indirectly obscuring the destinations were destined for.
How perceptive! It gave me great joy to see someone understand what this piece was about. It was a story unfolding these observations. Obviously I started somewhat out of sequence with structure but you still understood which is very flattering to me that someone, even if it was a bit of a reach, was able to grasp the meaning behind the obscurity. I am really grateful for the genuine feedback.
Hey. I was really heartened by your response. I kind of think of a lot of my writing like Haiku and I think that often the stuff is there you just got to look for it.
A lot of the poems I do, well I've been doing a blog and that space thing works better there in some instances like it can look like multiple poems cos they have different titles etc when actually it's all one poem.
Anyway, thanks for putting your thinking cap on, that was cool.
I loved that you really liked the piece "Holes Everywhere" and you couldn't be more right. Usually in my writing I can end them with happiness or a way "out" in this I have not found that way out yet and I feel like I'm just bleeding to the paper till I cant bleed anymore. I've found that more and more with what is going on with me, I just don't know what the "happy ending" will be...so I lay in the hole and just give up...for now...definitely not forever but until I've found my footing again.
Thanks for your insight, I love it when I can tell someone knows where I'm coming from and lets me know just what they think. Thank you, honestly:)