--Elite Writer Alias: erthona Name: Dale Tisdale ASL: 2oldMhere Bio: [ Quick Bio ] Website:[ Website ] Days Away: 221 Life Story: [ Ignore User ]
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It is neither of those things. It should be read precisely as written--
I approve of caged animals thrashing, the flashing of white teeth and red gums, the ragged splinters of ceilings.
The line break after animals is not grammatical, it is meant to be a 'shock' moment. Verb, not noun. It is like 'I approve of these animals...when they are fighting against their captivity. I also approve of these other things, which are consequences of their struggles.'
This concept is reflected again in the insect stanza.
thanks so much for your thoughts/help with noon tea. i will consider changes as it seems this poem is always in transition and i am not afraid to let it evolve.
i am horrible, simply horrible at puntuating anything properly. (i missed class that day).
anyhoo, it was just a moment captured after having been wordless for a period of time. seems i post it from time to time as a reminder that they do come back.
jeez Dale, you're a trooper. I think I'll read the poem again before I delve into your explanation and thoughts. Once I pinned down who lilith was I got the jist but was waiting to see if you were hanging around or heading back to kp or both.
I have 3 days off so now's the perfect time to explore your words.
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