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Hey Fred! I've been away a lot and I don't think I responded to your comment on 'Giant'. Thanx4 your repeated attention!
Yes, the "giant" is a shadow perhaps. Line from another pome: "Dogging a giant's footsteps, fleeing a dwarf's deeds".
How would a "shadow" image work, I wonder? I project my perceptions on two screens: one the past, the other the future. Each casts my shadow on the other ... and the shadows are different!
Just to let you know that I revised, updated and written several new poems:
I Carry These Words
Birds Sing at Night
My Dark Wine Sea
Flowers o my Coffin
Concrete Floor
Blurry Line
Water's Edge
If I should Say
If Blue Mountains Could Sing
Unspoken Words
Beneath You
If you have time, please stop by to read and briefly comment. I need fresh eyes encourage and improve poetry writing.
thank you for the comments on my sonnet the long journey home...i applaud you for actually telling me what i did wrong though i appreciate the critism as most people on here wont tell you how to improve...i will work on the meter and rhythm so that i adhere to the rules of the sonnet....as for being like Poe that is probally because my two greatest poetic influences are Poe and Frost so i have kind developed a depressing nature when writing...but again thanks for the comments i will return the favor shortly
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