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Thank you for commenting on my Badger story. I did edit it - (I had just been a little lazy and not gotten around to it - usually I am very particular about such things). Friend of Foe, by the way, was meant as it is.

For the record, by the way, I fear you have missed the point.

Take Care,
| Posted on 2007-04-26 10:56:57 | by Starless Knight - [ Reply to This ] -
Yet again I find myself agreeing with you in totality. Poetry in itself is a fine balancing act, as you touch upon quite eloquently.

When we get it right, we walk amongst Kings.

When we nearly get it right we walk amongst the many that understand.

When we struggle, but still attempt to attain the untenable - we are but human, and stride and strive with the unquenchable desire to be understood and appreciated.

But mainly to be understood, and by any means possible.


(not H.R.Puffenstuff)

Ben Gunn
| Posted on 2007-04-26 03:16:07 | by Ben Gunn - [ Reply to This ] -
fred, re- blood & [censored] etc

ty for your precise, concise and decisive observations on the above.

You seem to be able to detach yourself in an ( almost but never ) inhuman way from the subject, and deliver unerring criticism of the object. For this I thank you ( yet again in public, just in case you think the count is against you ) and can only agree with your considerations.

I have only one gripe. As is, the poem represents a specific time and therein a specific frame of mind. Any correction, as apt as indeed yours are, would, I think, dilute the overall impact; be it imperfect or not.

I hope you can at least find some common ground in my comments, and at the very least, accept my thanks at your praise of the final stanza.


Ben Gunn
| Posted on 2007-04-25 18:47:48 | by Ben Gunn - [ Reply to This ] -
Thanks for your comments, Fred, on Loss, Revised. I'm glad you liked the second version. I like it ever so much better than the first. I was getting ready to send it to my friend's husband and I read it again and it was just a bunch of clichés and tired language! How could I send that? What kind of tribute would that be? So I spent ALL DAY on it, but I finally got something I wouldn't be ashamed to send to him.

I have noticed that when you are experiencing an event - for instance, you've learned that a relative has cancer (or you have it) - you suddenly see it everywhere, much more than you'd seen it before. I think it was probably just as prevalent before, but now you've been made aware of it where before it was only on the periphery of your consciousness.

Okay, enough rambling. Thanks for your comments. mae
| Posted on 2007-04-24 02:39:16 | by mae - [ Reply to This ] -
Hi fred,

Thanks for your note on "listen to the stars" and taking time to write. I'll keep your suggestions but really don't have the mind to decide anything right now.

| Posted on 2007-04-23 10:44:31 | by nansofast - [ Reply to This ] -
Fred, Thanks for reading Song of Songs. This one was sort of a quick write... Waking up in the middle of the night with the need to write. I've had others comment on Twinning as well who don't quite get it either so I'm thnking on what to do with that. Poetry is always about sound to me. When I first wrote the piece I did it as a prose poem... just wrote it all out and lineated it later. But the meter is also very important which is why I had a few little axtra sounds. But you're right. There's very little I write that hasn't been chosen for a reason. It's nice to know there are readers of my work out there who know my style and me well enough to know that. Thanks Fred. I really appreciate it.

| Posted on 2007-04-22 09:39:11 | by DavidHirt - [ Reply to This ] -

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