--Elite Writer Alias: freshcookies Name: Natalie Ryder ASL: 18/F/USA Bio: [ Quick Bio ] Website:[ Website ] Blog:[ Blog ] Days Away: 24 Life Story: living on faith [ Ignore User ]
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sorry it's taken a while for me to thank you for the comment you left on my poem. i very much appreciate your kind words. i shall return the favour and comment one of your submissions tomorrow - i have some spare time in the evening.
Thanks for the grammar help. I'm actually fond of repetition, that's why I had the '79 paired with the '69. Mainly due to the 1969 song by Iggy and The Stooges. ^-^ And the sudden breaks were on purpose and with purpose as well. Again in reference to Iggy. There's a lot of references to The Stooges in there. But in the song Raw Power, there's a slight break in the end with just instruments then he breaks in and goes nuts singing/screaming "Raw power!" a bunch of times. I tried to kind of mimic that effect. *shrug*
I'm glad you liked it though!
Hey, thanks for the comment on New Found Friendship. I would like to put the music metaphor into the first line, I just haven't found the right word yet. Still searching!
Thanks for your post on LYSOL TRIUMPHANT. I know it had a lot of mistakes, I wrote it just for fun, but thanks for pointing out some of the stuff that didn't make sense or needed to be fixed! It helped me improve it and I didn't realize some of the mistakes until you pointed them out. Thanks!