--Elite Writer Alias: freshcookies Name: Natalie Ryder Bio: [ Quick Bio ] Website:[ Website ] Days Away: 2361 Life Story: living on faith [ Ignore User ]
Favorites: 6 Forum Posts: 2 Shoutbox Posts: 0 RP Posts: 0 Signup Date: 5191 D 14.22 Years 1.42 Decades 173.03 Months 741.57 Weeks 5.191000e+8 Heart Beats -There you go eggman Quote: &quot;Boredom is no more than refusing to relax&quot;
Thanks for your post on LYSOL TRIUMPHANT. I know it had a lot of mistakes, I wrote it just for fun, but thanks for pointing out some of the stuff that didn't make sense or needed to be fixed! It helped me improve it and I didn't realize some of the mistakes until you pointed them out. Thanks!
Thanks for the comment on "Enamored with Decrepitation." Yeah, I like the way the "dark paintings" line helped to make that stanza work with the pattern, but I also agree that the "tingles running down your spine" line is too long. However, I really liked that description, so I'll have to find a way to shorten it. Or, I might just leave it. haha, either way, your review was appreciated.
Thank you for your comment on 'Antipathy'. This was not one of my best pieces, but it held a lot of emotion. I wrote exactly what I was feeling at the time. I tend to use a lot of metaphors. I like to make people think a bit. I have actually tried to write poetry about love, happiness and the like, but it seems I write best when in worse moods. Go figure. (^_^) I was joking about it the other day saying, "If I ever wanted to be an accomplished writer, I would have to make my life a living hell." It is rather sad, but pretty funny all the same.