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    Journal: years pass
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    the last few years have been some of the best in lessons and thought. some of the worst as well. Isn't that how it goes though?


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    Thanks for your comments on "Freak Show Sam and the Fattest Woman on Earth". I guess I wrote it by combining true stories I've heard. There was a joke on SNL the other night about some man who weighed 680 pounds. They said he got fired for "being way too fat". I thought about how I laughed along with the rest of my family, but then about how sad it really was. I had a friend in college who was molested when she was young and by the time I met her she weighed close to 300 pounds. I read up on it and it is a thing girls often do to "protect" themselves after a sexual assault. I also thought about how bad my mother felt when she put on a whole bunch of weight. We later found out it was because she had a brain tumor that was pressing on her pituitary gland. Somehow all of that made me form this sympathetic character. I just got this image of a woman and having all of these things almost "buried" inside her--and then them falling out when she was lifted. I wanted to humanize a person who most of us would only see as "spectacle" if we heard about her or saw her on TV. But I wanted to do it in a way that wasn't overly sentimental. I'm glad the piece seemed to "work" for you on that level.

    Again, thanks for your critique.

    Jane
    | Posted on 2011-10-11 22:47:35 | by JanePlane - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    taking a view on your ba5tard poem but first of all thank you for the ovengloves.

    they're in there for their normalcy there waltons-esque inherent warmth component.

    as for the rest of it yes, it does slam along a bit here and there doesn't it? maybe in some ways like the narrative of my favourite screenwriters does...

    always a pleasure, never a chore.

    take it easy,

    k
    | Posted on 2010-06-13 06:41:56 | by Awkward - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    thank you for cautionary tale number 1.

    we are all of us creatures controlled to a greater or lesser degree by these two opposing factors: caution and desire.

    it is well to recognise where our paricular strengths lie - and play to them yes?

    *starts to take a stroll through hidden lady's catalogue*

    take it easy,

    k
    | Posted on 2010-02-07 10:44:25 | by Awkward - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    thx for the advice,first advice from nearly 1 year of my existence in this room,hehehe,yeah i need to work on my grammar,english is my second language,yet thx for the advice,actually i already used the grammar and spelling check on microsoft word,but dunno maybe it needs more human touch.hehehe
    | Posted on 2008-11-30 17:33:57 | by Soldier O_Tears - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Thanks for the advice it helps a lot so I appreciate it. I will definitely have to use those suggestions on my other poems thank you very much.
    -Danna
    | Posted on 2008-11-28 22:46:15 | by captureyourself - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Thanks for the comment. I'm still trying to tie it all together. It was worse before, but I'm getting there.
    | Posted on 2008-09-07 19:33:54 | by entropy - [ Reply to This ] -



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