Hello and thank you for the helpful comment you left on "a mountain poem". I've made one slight alteration already based on it, and it's certainly giving me plenty to consider when I next edit the poem.
Thank you for the consistent help and the time you took to. I must not have an ear for rhythm, or just ignorantly deaf for it. I am trying. I edited again, using your help - but it's still different, and I changed the punctuation around also.