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Okay...I know its been forever since ive been on the website but i recently moved and not really able to get on the internet as much as I would like. I am going to try to make up all those comments that I didnt respond to..so if i dont get to you my apologies..its not on purpose.
I'm really enjoying your comments, you really seem to read my words and understand what is happening.
Can I have you as my personal critic please?
The Lines you thought didn't flow on my song may possibly be because I kind of *gets embarrssed* just stuck two lines together because I liked the way it looked.
I actually only reallylike those lines in the whole thing, I had them lying around for ages and got desperate to use them.
The rest of the song is supposed to be a piss take but I think I did something wrong because noone seems to notice.
I was just pointing out about certain "black metal" bands pretending they're all into satanism when they know nothing about it, I never thought that people would believe that this was really one of those songs as some seem to xP
ANd you are right again on the chorus, it's just a jibe with no poetic thought there but if you have another way I can say "Cradle of Filth" (I tried not to be too obvious)in it I'd love to hear it.Please?
Anyways, thank you again for looking at my works, as I disappointed this time, if you wish, I can disappoint some more and I promise you I will write you a (hopefully) nice poem about anything you request.
The least I can do for your honesty and help
It seems I must thank you doubly, for kind words following my critique and also for the wonderful comments you left on my poem, Me, myself,I.
I am extremely flattered and rather embarrassed.
I will comment more of your work, I did enoy reading it, but I'm afraid commenting requires much more concentration that writing and I do little of that these days.
You will have me bugging you on at least most of your work :) but it will take a little time.
Thank you for stopping by to read Remembering to Die. I tried to stay away from the rhyme time on this one and the last lines of each stanza were to put an emphasis on the stanza itself. Sort of like giving the stanza a boost. I am glad you liked and most of all understood it.
Thakyou for reading "I wont forget you"... sorry this is such a delayed reply, but I havn't had the chance to go on the net recently. I'm glad you liked it so much and could understand where I was coming from. Thanx again
~hannah~
p.s. by the way, I didnt actually post it as a poem, just another write.
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