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i saw your post on Astrology, here are my thoughts:

the poem is essentially a monologue. i imagined that the speaker was looking up at the sky and addressing Mars, his astrological planet. he takes issue with the conventions associated with an Aries, notably the adjectives he uses "demanding, intense, uncompromising to ignorance" all negative qualities associated with he Aries, but he also owns them and dismisses them with the hopes that he can sway Mars to his way of thinking. my impression is that the speaker wants to change the look of Mars, he wants Mars to be closer to March which is green and associated with spring, rather than brooding and red. and the poem reveals the speaker to be classic Aries, intensely focusing rage on a benign target-Mars

hope that helps. the poem is actually in a trilogy if you have further interest.
| Posted on 2011-01-19 22:30:30 | by roycureton - [ Reply to This ] -
  
Thank you for commenting on my poem... I apologize for taking so long to thank you...
I will have to take the time to edit the poem later, because you are right, some parts are sort of jumbled and confusing...
But I will explain what I meant on the parts that I think the wording is right...
In the third stanza, I will have to edit the wording, but what I was trying to say is my heart will take me to the heavens. And I wanted my heart and my love to be separate from one another... One is pulling me up (my heart towards the heavens) and one is pulling me down (my love toward the abyss)...
I go into that in the fourth stanza, which is why I say "My heart will follow, this I am sure," because while my heart and my love are pulling in opposite directions, my heart will follow my love before it leads me astray...
And in the fifth stanza I meant that the journey will be safe, but painful... and that while my heart wants to go another direction, she will follow my love because, despite the pain, it will be her "remedy"... I just meant the end result will be far greater than the pain endured for a little while.
Anyway, thank you again for your comment... I will need to edit the poem and make it flow more smoothly... I think I tried to stuff too many ideas into too few words. Thanks again :)
-Einna
| Posted on 2010-12-07 02:59:30 | by einna - [ Reply to This ] -
  
Yes, why yes I am MUAHAHAHAHAHA!
| Posted on 2010-10-02 02:29:30 | by SammySueYou - [ Reply to This ] -
  
I can truly say I can relate to all of your poetry, maybe not the same details but very similair feelings.
| Posted on 2010-09-23 02:51:46 | by SammySueYou - [ Reply to This ] -
  
i feel old. ive been through some [censored]. i get whatcha mean though.
| Posted on 2010-08-27 18:28:18 | by Aphotic Sunrise - [ Reply to This ] -
  
Thank you alot for the comment on my work entitled the Martyr I give the Lord Jesus the glory!
| Posted on 2010-07-15 17:48:39 | by Doublefeather - [ Reply to This ] -



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