Thank you for commenting on "Return of the Ex". I agree he doesn't deserve me, but my loins beckon his arrival nevertheless. He's just a MSN Messenger tease now though, telling me how much he'd love to do me ... but he can't 'cause he's not single anymore. His definitely thrives on the attention.
Thanks for commenting on 'i am from barbed wire.' You're right that it needs more images. That was the first stanza of the analytical poem--it's supposed to be an essay in poem format. My school invented it, I believe, or stole it and took credit.
Thank you for the comment on "The Depressed Slave and a Temptress".
Yeah, I figured I'd use a lot of personification since the whole suicide thing is played out so it would be as unique as possible. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I hope you read more of my poems in the future.
I myself often do not have a clear feeling, and thus it is hard for me to write something that does. Also, I do not write in specifics very well, when I do so I find that I just isolate interpretations, so that as well will be tricky for me to improve. As far as the line that made you laugh, it's alright, I don't mind :-p. However, it does say "i'm" previously, and it was meant to be based as if "i", or the person relating to it was saying it as such. I don't know what i'm saying, or who is even saying it.
You know that feeling? I hope it makes a little more sense atleast in that line.
And nah, I don't mind the harsh cricism, but like I said, I have trouble making changes based on what you said, as if the piece all of a sudden became a story of specifics, it would ruin alot of it. However, I do see what you're saying, so if you can help me out maybe by being a bit more specific or something, I could improve the write based on that. Thanks for the help though, I'll get on that typo, and see if i can clarify anything without feeling like I messed up my image of it :-p.