Journal: The last entry -------------------------------------------
My first journal and my last entry. All of which is the same. A dream never comes true and love is just a dream. Real spiritual love is all that I find in myself and in none. Why is it that life is not for me to live... Why is it that a defective piece yet tries to survive with what it knows... Maya .... A dream that can never come true
1. I disagree with you about the description. I disapprove in general of a poet explaining his own poem. It feels like cheating to me. I try to only 'explain' my poems when I reference some obscure bit of knowledge.
But you are right about content. Originally, there were another few stanzas which contained the 'moral' of the poem after that last line...but they were so terribly heavy-handed and brutish that I cut them out. So the poem is a bit weak.
2. I like this title, because in my mind I use it both as the adjective and the injunction. Not necessary for the reader to catch, just kind of like an easter egg for myself.
3. Again, yes. Chopping off those few stanzas has made it into a 'meaningless' poem. I still like it, because I think it's soothing and, ahem, soft--but it is lacking.
4. I'm confused on the distinction between 'sense of calm' and 'feel calm'. Can you explain that better?
Thanks again for the critique, it is much appreciated.
Hey there you don't know me... But I am Jane. The persons poem you commented on that was called Jane Can't spell...
well it was about me.
It got mad that I wouldn't spell check my poem on its command because I was not able to at the time and as a writer I write from the heart before I spell check. I just thought I would let you know the reson every one of those people on there are mad at her is because I am a nice person and she said alot of mean things and they are my freinds, I on the other hand dont got time to play games with he/she.
I just thought I would let you know....
Thanks for the comms on WHY? I did a bit of meditaion so I decided on this answe as well:
Yes you are on the right track if I was New Age as well I could agree to that you are your own God in a certain way: yes I can agree to that as well.
I am fundamentally Christian in concept and Israel in belief. I can dote on Wiccan, esoteric founded philosophies, New Age I do grasp fundamentally and also conspire together. Bhuddism trained a bit, yes and am Clairsentience quite strongly and am Aura in vision, Reiki and Karuna ki initiated and so on. I read Runes. Love my crystals and my Bible so I am not missing much.
I can agree with you on many concepts but will stay with Christianity as a True Path.
The rest? There is nothing I know of that God my Father and Son and Spirit did not Create for me to dwell in and become wise beyond eternity.