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Journal: ARG! -------------------------------------------Mood: once again... ARG!    NOBODY EVER BLOODY WRITES! NEVER! slow. I am out of my mind crazy with homework, but utterly crazy at the complete standstill my position on this site has taken! and I have high hopes I would come to find at least something told to me! I am thankful for the few tid-bits I have received, but dang it! Could I BEG for more? While I am crazy with homework, this is a major space for me, but finding no social escape concerning writing, not on the other sites I am on, and not here, I am bloody going out of my mind. Anyone! Alms for the poor! ...Created 2007-09-20 15:15:29     [ View Past Journals ] [ View as Blog ]

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(the comments box is f*cked so here's my thoughts on civilian): Hard as it may be to master the A A Rhyme scheme (sarcasm intended) i came out of this poem a little unimpressed. to sum this piece; EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE. the rhyming seemed a little stretched with you having to use some of the same words over again, and i couldn't really find the point to your poem. it wasnt really adressing a specific topic, but blindly jabbing a fork at social context. i think you have the potential, but you seem to be trapped in a high school english class prison. try to approach a poem more artistically, more aware. remember that rhyming can be the biggest felony if it takes away from the meaning of a piece. that is all - dan

| Posted on 2007-11-04 22:49:46 | by DBC - [ Reply to This ] -

Thank you for your very insightful comment on my poem (and I see it wasn't your first one of that kind here on ES, lol). You have pin-pointed everything I thought during my writing of this poem and maybe even some things I didn't - you are really talented for this :) However, there's only one thing you interpreted differently than I imagined. It is not that I am unsure, or must not let anyone see I am looking for "it". You see, my weird mind seemed to turn to a whole other direction while writing the poem - in the beginning and middle it WAS about other persons and my relations to them, but at the end I seemed to have started again with my "spirituality stuff" (as I tend too these days)..and the fact is, on the way of reaching a certain "it", I can't see or touch it. Sorry if this is confusing, but it is hard to explain, considering that even I don't know what it is exactly (just like you so nicely noticed). Thank you for the comment again, and for the fav add. Be well.

| Posted on 2007-10-09 13:49:06 | by shoggoth - [ Reply to This ] -

Lady of Shalott, Sword scepter reigning over English countryside with loyal subjects aplenty digging for their subsistence in the fertile sod to grow a plant never before seen by human eyes... Okay I don't know what the heck that was. I just felt like writing it. Yay run-on sentences! Welcome to eliteskills, m'lady.

| Posted on 2007-09-21 13:47:04 | by manwithnoname - [ Reply to This ] -

Welcome to Elite.

| Posted on 2007-09-01 20:41:34 | by Katlord - [ Reply to This ] -

It's nothing really, I'm just trying to do a nice thing for everyone. Look, if you got questions about anything (which I doubt you do, you're already settled), ask me.

| Posted on 2007-08-30 19:42:32 | by Finnigan - [ Reply to This ] -

Welcome to ES!

| Posted on 2007-08-30 17:23:52 | by Finnigan - [ Reply to This ] -

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