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Yes, the exclamation point. I do see your point (see what I did there!), and I get what you're trying to go for. Maybe I just have weird exclamation point connotations because I was force-fed them as a child or something.
Ah well. I like the poem, as evidenced by my favorite-ing. So who cares about improving it, right?*