--Elite Writer Alias: lovedeathsdeath Name: Jeremy Norris ASL: 20/M/NCUSA Bio: [ Quick Bio ] Website:[ Website ] Blog:[ Blog ] Days Away: 8 Life Story: Chasing the wind [ Ignore User ]
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You're welcome for the comment on April or May, it was a good poem; it made you ask some questions. In spite of everything is probably one of my favorite poems I've written. My poetry tends to be filled with hyperbolic metaphors and such and this one was much more simple. No fluff, it felt more raw to write, even more to recite. It also didn't have the same kind of flow most of my poems do. Thanks again for the comment and by the way, I really like the gunshot/comma line too.
um thanks for ur comment on lettig go. i didnt take the words i wrote from anywhere but my head. um it wasnt even intended to be a poem it was an away message i had made for aim, adn idk i liked it and wanted to make it more then that. well um thanks anyway
Thanks for another review
(I really will pay them back one of these days)
I see what you mean about the angsty start, I never noticed before.
In your opinion, do you think it would tone it down if it was lengthened with a kind of intro before the chorus?
I will try to change it tonight either way.
(It's not often I do that on advice)
If you like the style (NOT fishing for comments) I have a poem called Tears of a ... that is pretty much the same.
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