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Thanks for stopping by and checking out "Don't Bring Me Roses." The word 'pleasanter' is not grammatically correct - in fact, its not even a word. I made it up. I like it for its whimsy which seems - to me - to fit that particular series of lines. But you're not the first person to mention it, so I suppose I should change it. Sigh.
Re: the last line, I honestly think if I fancied up that line, it would take away from its impact.
And you know, I think I originally had my line structure different than it is here (for the tsunami stanza that is 4 lines rather than 3). That stanza should just be 3 lines because the whole poem has clipped along in perfect symmetry. I'll have to look at that. Thanks for point it out.
Hey im from tha western half to but up more.. towards gardner if u no where that is if not its west of fitchburg n worcestor around there.. n its all good aboutt tha respond havent had much time to get on here either n give ppl comments lately..