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| I wanted to leave a comment on "The Leading edge" but there's no box for it so I'll leave it here . To say that the metaphysical mystique of the human race is an imaginary condition is a gross denial of evolutional principle . What then is the nature of problematic prosthesis ? the personification of sartorial perfection , or the picturesque visage of spectral grace ?
Bruce |
| | Posted on 2010-09-15 07:26:59 | by monad - [ Reply to This ] - |
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| Thank you for your comment on Soul
I'm glad you enjoyed it, though the key to achieving immortality is stated in the first line of the poem. The only problem is that its a whole lot easier said than done. -Will |
| | Posted on 2010-09-04 01:24:05 | by Rhythmal - [ Reply to This ] - |
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| Thanks for your comments on "Broken Dreams and Empty Bottles" and "A Kindred Coffee Soul".. On the first one I appreciate that you saw both the strength of the piece and the depth of reflection as well.. On the second one the poem is written from the view point of the worker selling the coffee yes.. Actually it happened to me at a previous job and I wrote that poem right after it happened the very same day..
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| | Posted on 2010-08-22 20:39:10 | by Maskannai - [ Reply to This ] - |
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| hello! thanks for commenting.
the first half is about being hurt before :) hard to explain if not experienced by the person reading! thanks again. b |
| | Posted on 2010-08-22 00:43:20 | by biska - [ Reply to This ] - |
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| Re:" Contiguity Continuities "
Although I agree the use of so many sesquipedalian words can lead to confusion I assure it's not a random jumble . Perhaps it would help to know that I am into martial arts . Being said warrior led me to many seemingly stultifying arguments about the nature of its being . This poem was an attempt to make sense of this prophylaxis protocol without losing sight of objective or personal sanctity . Take for instance the line "Mirador bartizan panorama stalwart bastion bulwark tableau live" . A mirador is the highest obtainable platform or roof of a building . A bartizan is a defensive turret on such a platform . Obviously panorama speaks of the view from such a place . The rest of the line speaks of how this tableau affected me . The next line speaks of the tactics this ensued . With the "rainbow mare" line I'm talking about making sense of the various colored belts involved . In the last line I speak of my ultimate navigation of these things and the ecstatic euphoria I was left with . I realize this is an incomplete explanation but if you look these words up now the meaning may be easier to divine . Monad PS: If the use of so many big words leaves you cold you might try "Echo" or "Dream" or even "F&%^%$g killing you" . Not that they're any less abstract , but they're much less of a lexical nightmare . |
| | Posted on 2010-08-21 01:45:40 | by monad - [ Reply to This ] - |
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| Thanks for the comment, but do not be mistaken, my words may seem off but they hold cryptic message. A message most people say have been prophesized for hundreds of years, but I didn't say anything to get me kicked out, the poem is mearly a riddle. See if you can find its meaning.
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| | Posted on 2010-08-19 23:00:18 | by 13thprotector - [ Reply to This ] - |
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