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    Journal: Like the old...
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    Mood: The Usual
      
    And how they feel coming back to their first home - sad and reminiscent, but as long as you've moved on, then you can look back and smile


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    Yes. To promote thought, and open mindedness. I enjoyed your piece. Thank you for posting it. :)

    -Kit
    | Posted on 2011-03-19 21:08:27 | by Kitkara - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    I really like it: the poem is where I'm at, what I'm feeling. To find it today was something. :)
    | Posted on 2011-03-19 19:07:55 | by theludus - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    "Lazy and arrogant"

    Sheesh, you summed up my character by six lines!

    It is not so much that I am lazy, but busy with non-art things. It makes writing with purpose take a backseat, so I often settle with getting down a little something & hopefully later coming back to it.

    Arrogant, no: You assume that I think it's good enough as it is. In fact, mostly I find my writing style inhibiting overall. Like "Aaah, that's a good idea & I'm really not doing it justice."

    But I thank you for the comment & the push, both are what I'm looking for. :)

    | Posted on 2011-03-19 19:06:35 | by Santi - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    appreciate the comments on "stories"

    thanks for taking the time.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-03-15 16:06:49 | by jacoberin - [ Reply to This ] -
      

    Hi! Your disclaimers at the end of both comments cracked me up. To this I say: You know what you know, & I appreciate you sharing your thoughts. That's the point right? right.

    So yes, confusion noted & I think it is because it is in the middle -- of my thoughts & feelings & the middle of her action. Minus the poetics, this is where the poem came from: We're in Sicilia & I am five years old outside with my great-grandma who has moved from her usual chair to sit in the grass near me, with her sewing basket (she was mending clothes at the time). & all at once, she leans back, suddenly so heavy with life, & it is strange how someone that old was once so young. That is how she passed on. I remember the leaf falling when she leaned back on the lattice & she didn't bother to brush it away. I thought she had fallen asleep & kept playing. I will see about possibly adding some surroundings to give it a little more orientation & context. Thanks!

    & the postcard. It was literally something I wrote on a postcard to my husband, & so I don't think I'll change it much. I posted two other poems on postcards that are actually more complete & poetic just before that one.

    I appreciate the reading & critiquing!
    | Posted on 2011-03-14 22:18:48 | by Santi - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    you should come back...i miss you...
    | Posted on 2009-07-17 11:11:12 | by purplesun24 - [ Reply to This ] -



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