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    Journal: Human Cruelty
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    Mood: Stressed
      
    I'm fucked. It doesn't matter what I think or say. I'm still fucked. SO MANY people REFUSE to maintain morals and ethical principles. They just don't give a shit. They don't have compassion. And thanks to these few individuals who couldn't shit out a sliver of it, humanity is fucked. We are all fucked. I hate this goddamn world and its people. I hate me more than ever. I hate that I have a conscience. I hate that I care. I want to give up on myself so much. I just want to fucking die. I hate so many people right now. NOBODY deserves to live. I want to go home. No--I just don't want to be here anymore. I hate existing. I don't want to exist if people are going to be like this. I hate my existence. I hate I hate I hate I hate...ALL.


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    Re: How Can I Know?

    The comment box was missing, so I thought I'd leave this here:


    "Show me the glass full of diamonds,
    And I'll show you a glass full of shards."

    This is an interest phrase because it can be taken a variety of ways. I at once thought of it as a spin on "half empty/half full". I do wonder about the use of "shards" & maybe "coal" would work better? I only say this because coal is basically a rudimentary form of the diamond. It also goes along with your use of "mountain" to express weight. There is a great deal of determination in this poem, & again I'm reminded of another old adage of "moving mountains." It is actually through struggle, so to speak, & many geological processes & not to mention hundreds miles below earth, that a coal does become a diamond. Maybe this is so with humans too; need to go through a certain process before we shine.

    "And life is a mountain under which we all
    Struggle to lift off our shoulders." I don't think "under" is necessary in this line. It doesn't make sense grammatically. I like the intent of this write & think that it could go further & deeper. I would like to see what more you could do with the analogies that you have going.
    | Posted on 2011-01-25 19:43:06 | by Santi - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    sorry my comment offended you. touchy subject for me. appreciate that you gave it back to me. I realize that I deserved it...
    ~k
    | Posted on 2011-01-20 21:16:21 | by KimmyMim - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Oh no I have no problem with you or anybody giving any commentary about my personal matters related to my work effort or a journal entry in general.
    As for what is going on and why I am changing my entire writing strategy because what I have learned in a 4 month period.That is something I can't really explain right now because I could just give you an essay, involving the world and every single individual on this planet for that matter.I even find it cool you had something to put forth about what I had stated.Just look out for me here with posts and all and then you'll see what I'm talking about.
    Bye bye Mo Peace, Knowledge , love and inspiration. ^_^ And as far as you having some input about any of my entries, feel free to do so anytime, seriously.I want to know other people perspectives too.Right now I can't afford to just focus only on me, telling what is going on with me and not expect anyone to give intelligent feedback.

    RG
    | Posted on 2011-01-13 03:14:01 | by Rex Gold - [ Reply to This ] -
      
    Thank you for being interested in my work.
    | Posted on 2011-01-07 23:15:18 | by Rex Gold - [ Reply to This ] -



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