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thank you dearly for the comment
i actually have chapters one thru eight already posted, plus another excerpt
its called as yet untitled
if you are interested
and i will have to read your version too
Thanks for your comment on "VIRgin land". Yeah, my that's my favourite part of the poem as well. I thought it would be neat not only to write the word "saws" but draw it as well.
That line that you didn't get:
"Abund
(ant)ance"
Was just me messing about. I was thinking "abundant, abundance" and I decided to break the words up = abund(ant), abund...ance
I normally don't try and help people out with my poetry but since your first interperetation was basically correct, I'll let you know. The line you thought was a typo was another line about appliances. It's basically a college student who panics when Hir iPod turns off, so SHe calls someone on Hir phone.
The song is just commentary on zombie college students. You basically nailed it.
i am so glad you liked recoil....i felt better after i wrote it, and then worse for feeling it again...yeah, i try to be pretty straighforward but a lot of the time it gets me in trouble so i tend to write in riddles these days
as for that last bit:
You disgust me with your staring, and you are always staring. I dont like you [censored], whats your problem. Dont [censored] try to talk to me. I dont want to hear it
thats a little bit of what i want to say to her, to scream at her, to make her look away feel all the pain of how much i dislike her
she trully does stare at me, every day, for an hour, all through envir. sci. and it gives me the creeps, cause she just sits and stares like shes thinking things she shouldnt be, especially since she knows mostly how we all feel about her
anyway
enough malice today, my karma cant handle it
thanks so much for commenting, i really do appreciate it...
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