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Name: Lissy Does it matter?
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A good woman is like a pack of cards, you need a heart to love her, a diamond to marry her, a club to whack her over the head, and a spade to bury the bitch

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Hey, thx for taking the time to offer insight on my poems. I like to think a poem has a writer and a speaker, with the writer being the person who scripts the speaker. I think you may have misunderstood these roles, as with both those poems I coincidentally adapted a confident, "superior" persona for the speaker, to add effect to the poem. I feel this gives more character to the poems rather than a subtle tone that may not leave a lasting impression. You're other points were very helpful as well, and I feel I have really grown as a writer after reading your comments.
| Posted on 2008-02-29 16:07:00 | by 7makaveli - [ Reply to This ] -
Don't worry about it. You could write the nastiest, most degrading thing you could think of and it still wouldn't faze me. I'm not easily upset.

The Bird
| Posted on 2008-02-29 07:36:09 | by Swimming Bird - [ Reply to This ] -
Thanks for commenting on my poem "Blots of Red"... about the pasty thing, I know the word 'pasty' doesn't exactly fit. Truth be told, the only reason I chose it was because I am an extremely pale person... but you're right, I should find a better word.
Thanks again for the critique!
| Posted on 2008-02-28 20:37:01 | by naturallyevil - [ Reply to This ] -
thanks so much for the comment and faves add
| Posted on 2008-02-28 19:01:19 | by blu_kittin - [ Reply to This ] -
I know, a hypocrite writing a hypocritic piece on the world's hypocracy. I think I like it for that very reason. Thanks for the comment though. Or should I say comments. One thing I like to do when I talk to someone is look at their quick bio (if they have one) and their stats. When I looked at your stats I saw your latest critique and realized, "Hey, that's mine too." So I wanted to say thanks for that comment too. And being brutally honest, I'd have to say my mind really is darker than that, but comedy helps keep it in check. Been busy lately, but if I find time I'll try to read some of yours. Thanks again.

The Bird
| Posted on 2008-02-28 08:33:28 | by Swimming Bird - [ Reply to This ] -
Hey, I stumbled across your quote and thought it was hilarious. Not too many people have funny quotes. I just wanted to say thanks for the smile.

The Bird
| Posted on 2007-05-24 10:17:07 | by Swimming Bird - [ Reply to This ] -

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