wow, it has been awhile. i just started logging back in myself...my book, my project, my writing, my thoughts in general, everything has been changing and getting rearranged...really, its just been in this past week that ive opened up my old journals, and looked over ideas left incompleted...im hoping to start posting some new writing, i appreciate you taking the time to see whats up.
Thank you for taking the time to comment and suggest.
I like the word enthrall, im not sure what the exact meaning is but like you say, 'a cool word to use'. i was conscious that it stuck out, which i liked because i felt it added emphasis of being consumed in owe of the place. which brings me on to the next point.
'Head hung heavy on my tranquil neck'
What i meant to say hear was that my neck was relaxed and my head just hanging back. if you see what i mean. basically 'chilling' hehe.
Stream of virginity, cascading from mysterious, unassailable pastures, commanding the horizon.
'The most unique and beautiful description of a body of water ever read, and I'm originally from California.'
Thank you so much for saying so. BIG smile on my face! I would be interested to know if you found it clear that 'unassailable pastures' were mountains and hills in the distinct that the stream was running from. of course it is ok if you took them for something else. to me they were mountains, to someone else they can be anything they like to see on horizon. hehe.
this habitat for eternity, how ever long it lasts.
I mean till life and its troubles want me back again. Although i did think of the damage we do to the environment after i had wrote it. i think that is the nice thing about poetry, you can interpret it anyway you want. makes the poem very personal and appeals particularly to the individual.
Sorry it has taken me so long to get back to you btw. I havenít been logged in for a while, I have been very busy.