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Well, I can't help thinking that your ''poetry'' should not be listed under poetry but under the ''good potential hip hop song''. That's how your poems look like. Like hip hop stuff. I'm not saying they aren't good, I'm saying you picked the wrong genre to put them in. On one hand you're right, many people in here think themselves to be poets but actually write junk. On the other hand, some of them really have a talent. In definition, poetry is the art of beautiful words, rythm, rhyme or the simple expression through free verse in the form of stanzas. Your poem 'At it again', doen't fit in that definition.
Both verses were ill. I've just grown to a point where I am tired of hearing this garbage. You know what I'm sayin? If they are going to speak....especially behind a mic.....why not make it something to TRULY listen to. Why has hip hop just become a tight beat and a whack hook?
For your age....you are doing big things. Believe me.
And....that's too funny about Troy.....to think I thought that he hated me.
I am a cool white girl though! I may be white....but I have flavor.