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Spring Flowers


Author: SavedDragon
Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 303 /258 /86
Words: 76
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Spring Flowers



The flowers are blooming
So I’m now assuming
That spring time is not far away,

It pours in the morning
And every night every hour
Of every single day,

I lie in my bed and think in my head
Of the flowers that will come to be
In the front of my yard
Swaying back and forth softly
For people to pass by and see.




Submitted on 2006-04-22 10:45:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Cute...that kind of ticks me off. I don't like the idea of cute...of course I won't I'm a guy. But it's really good . The fact that it's so short adds to it. It's almost as if your waiting for something else to come, other than flowers...I don't know. It seems to have a backstory but it eludes the reader....hah, maybe I'm crazy.

Catching up,
Paco the Poet of Arson
| Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by Flamequill | [ Reply to This ]
  cute poem. i never even considered writing poetry or rap lyrics when i was in eighth grade. this is actually pretty good.
| Posted on 2006-04-24 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  It's cool. Kinda of reminds me of things I wrote for school when I was alot younger... I'm not gonna tell you to try and make it better, because this is the poet you were then, the one that evolved into the one you are now.

your friend
| Posted on 2006-04-22 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]


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