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    dots Submission Name: Cado ex Veniadots

    Author: xeternalshadowx
    ASL Info:    17/m/pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    4.72 - 121/137/55
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       Satanail Chronicles - 1

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    dotsCado ex Veniadots

    9th Order swords heaving aloft their grave,
    Unbeknownst Thine anagenesis.
    Kindred adrift in jugular waste,
    As above,
    So death and eternity.

    Cocytus’ breath cometh unto thy wings,
    Arcana-frozen teardrops fell.
    “Satirize mine maledict splendor,
    O Satanail.”

    “Terror eyes suspend thy grace”,
    Ol’ dragon’s flame bellows,
    “Of will be done in Heavens shadow,
    Of empires fall, and frail endeavor.”

    Desperation of His holiness,
    Thy fallen God in fire.
    Throne ov darkness,
    Behold the crimson spirit
    Of thy maker’s hammer…


    Submitted on 2006-04-22 13:17:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this seemed extremely strange to me. my conclusion is that you may be doing abit of dabbling in the occult from your encryption.
    9th order i'm assuming has to do with tarot. a minor suite. though i'm not fluent in this area, i have done some "experimenting" of my own when i was a kid.
    all i really can say is be careful. especially if you don't really know what your doing or "chanting" /whatnot.
    i'm not trying to put you down in anyway, but honestly i just don't feel originality from this peice. like your trying to imitate something/someone else. just "strive to be original" like the man said.
    that's all i really have to say.
    | Posted on 2006-04-22 00:00:00 | by vohomegirl | [ Reply to This ]

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