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    dots Submission Name: Lust mixed with Liquordots

    Author: haileebobailee
    ASL Info:    18/F/NV
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 30/41/15
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLust mixed with Liquordots

    It started with alcohol
    Lust and truth or dare
    “Kiss someone”
    Childish but you picked me

    Back to our high school ways
    A peck on the lips
    Got laughter and teasing
    From our friends

    Then with a sheepish grin
    you grabbed my hand
    and kissed me
    like you meant it

    The room went dark
    And the witty banter faded
    All I heard and felt was you

    I sent you 20 breakup songs
    When she broke your heart
    Your feelings felt real
    And your thank you warm

    So lets stop fucking around
    Keeping secrets buried
    And feelings hidden
    We’re not twelve anymore

    Lets give it a chance
    Jump in with both feet
    And see if we float
    Or if we drown
    Either way
    We do it together

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      Aww I love that.
    I don't know if it's just me, but I thought it was cute.

    My favorite part is the end:

    "Lets give it a chance
    Jump in with both feet
    And see if we float
    Or if we drown
    Either way
    We do it together"

    That is gorgeous.
    Very nicely worded

    I can give you nothing but compliments.

    | Posted on 2006-04-24 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]

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