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    dots Submission Name: The boydots
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    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I found this when I was cleaning my room...its about my ex reed...aka asshole


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    dotsThe boydots
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    I looked into his cold empty eyes and all I could see was the dense fog of lies and broken promises.

    I knew deep down he had a small shallow heart and that he never cared, never loved.
    Lost between the lies that were spoken from that cold stone heart. How could such hatered spew from those once gentel lips?

    Soulless, heartless and mimdless young boy that I once called a man for I once too played your childish games but then realized whom I hurt. Others as well as myself. Never could I take back those words that butchered all those relationships.

    Alone you must feel because of your unthinkable actions.

    Cold you must feel because those crue words you whispered about those who once cared.

    Rejection I know you feel because everyone knows what lies you speak.

    I took a leap of faith trusting you and now I have fallen. Such bitter lies drip from your tounge which once spoke such meaningful word. Tears have fallen from the hearts you have broken.




    Submitted on 2006-04-22 14:11:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is beautifly written and filled with so much sorrow.My fav part is

    "I knew deep down he had a small shallow heart and that he never cared, never loved.
    Lost between the lies that were spoken from that cold stone heart. How could such hatered spew from those once gentel lips?

    Soulless, heartless and mimdless young boy that I once called a man for I once too played your childish games but then realized whom I hurt"

    I Love this poem and I seriously hope he gets/got what he deserved.
    | Posted on 2006-06-22 00:00:00 | by darkeveris | [ Reply to This ]


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