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    dots Submission Name: It is timedots
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    Author: Emerging Soul
    ASL Info:    48/VERY female/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    4.36 - 1240/1114/244
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Rest now, my weary heart
    Let your troubled patter cease
    It is time to let your healing start
    So that I may find my peace
    The time has come to take control
    And let go of the pain
    Release the angry, tortured soul
    And learn to smile again
    For if you don't, then I shall die
    And life will cease to be
    An empty shell, a lonely lie
    Will be all that's left of me
    And I have lived for far too long
    As a shadow of myself
    The time has come to right the wrong
    And place it on a shelf
    Then leave it there to gather dust
    Where memories remain
    For letting go and risking trust
    Is the way to heal our pain
    It is time




    Submitted on 2004-05-08 07:29:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was nice, but not one of my favorite pieces. It's more of the topic that didn't really grasp my attention, I think you're writing style is great! I did like the ending though... "It is time" a simple phrase can unite an entire piece!
    | Posted on 2004-06-02 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... the rhyme scheme was very very beautiful.. it flowed extremely well. i don't have much more to say, except that i liked this very much --- you have me speechless. lol. to my faves it goes.
    -dandan
    | Posted on 2004-05-08 00:00:00 | by Dandan | [ Reply to This ]
      really awesome... I loved the ebb and flow of the words, it was postly in meter, there were a few lines that had an extra syllablye or two, for example:
    Will be all that's left of me
    as opposed to:
    Where memories remain
    And extra syllable in the first one... that happenes a few times and it kind of interrupts the flow. I like the fact that it was in meter, not many people can do metric poetry successfully. Just a few tweaks here and there and I'd say you have a great poem there! rating: great job ~Cora
    | Posted on 2004-05-08 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]


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