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    dots Submission Name: Fallen Fatedots

    Author: shootingstar
    ASL Info:    22/f/hell
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 102/120/21
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       My hopelessness on paper. this is me.

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    dotsFallen Fatedots

    Within these scars, a place to hide,
    The shattered pieces left inside.
    Infected by the twisted truth
    To kill a violent blossomed youth
    For every anger left un touched,
    An empty soul who knows too much.
    As inspirations ravaged muse,
    Reveals the stars to those who choose.

    Bind me, blind me, fallen fate,
    For nothings end, a frozen wait.
    Poisoned apple bitten through,
    Seems quite tragic, no one knew.
    In to shallow razors well,
    Another acid, cold tear fell.

    Pick up the pieces, start again.
    Nevermind, you've reached the end.
    Pass the torch. Who can relate?
    Bind me, blind me, fallen fate.

    Submitted on 2004-05-08 09:02:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      amazing. it is truly outstanding. its so good that i can hardly think of words to describe it. GREAT WRITE!
    | Posted on 2004-05-08 00:00:00 | by danflor4 | [ Reply to This ]
      it's very very good, but your description doesn't do it justice... I thought oh no another teen depression one, but it aws actually good. VERY GOOD USE OF METER i'm so proud... =^..^= hm I think you should make it turn happy at the end. I thought it was going there with 'pick up the pieces, start again' but then it was like those clichéd punk songs that were like ALMOST THERE EVERYTHING'S GOING TO BE ALL RIGHT - but no, death and destruction as usual. Be different make it actually have a happy ending! If it's about you, all the more reason to be optimistic. ~Cora
    | Posted on 2004-05-08 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]

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