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    dots Submission Name: 'I'M A BAD GIRL'(Girl Rap/Hardcore)dots
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    Author: ms.v
    Elite Ratio:    6.72 - 109/24/20
    Words: 510
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
    Total Views: 1286
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2942



    Description:
        Girl Rap/Hardcore copyrighted To get back at all the guys who think the can trick us.


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    dots'I'M A BAD GIRL'(Girl Rap/Hardcore)dots
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    I'M A BAD GIRL''


    I'm a bad girl
    because I boned you
    and disowned you
    so don't act like
    you didn't see it com-en
    just because I MADE YOU!wait
    I got tired of masturbating
    told me you loved me
    it's only been three weeks
    you must think a girl
    is something weak
    I heard all my girls rolled you
    it's true you're good
    it's true you're fine
    but have no mind
    your just a behind
    so thanks for the good time
    It's been OK!
    I'll call you next
    I want to get laid
    don't tell me
    I though we had more
    I know you want to hit it
    some more
    It to bad it to sad
    when a guy like you want to
    hit it one more time
    come on -
    you and I would both be bored
    don't act like your going to cry
    be a man you know the one
    you act like when your around the boyz
    I'M A BAD GIRL!
    YA! thats right and next time
    I'm going to ride
    what ever feels good
    between my thigh's
    don't get it wrong
    you held it up strong
    but the feeling is long gone
    it time to move on
    so don't get it twisted
    I will miss it
    but it time to slap it on its ass
    and let it pass
    you know you know
    I'M A BAD GIRL
    De-Wet'n Wild!
    now that my style
    because
    I'M A BAD GIRL
    just out to have a good time
    don't think your all that for me
    your just warmer than a vibration
    can't you see?
    and something about you
    I will miss Oh!
    Yes! Its your big stick
    but your boyish mind
    makes me sick
    so hears to all the studs
    who think their all that
    US girls here
    all want to give you
    a mega cheer
    here's to the boyz
    with the small toys
    and the big brains
    don't worry we will marry you
    anyway
    and here's to the guys
    that just want between our thighs
    we're not stupid
    but thanks it's been a sweaty ride
    and when us girls get together
    you know we're going to talk about it it's natural enhancement OH!
    and some were you might get a mention
    because you attached to it
    so don't be sad be glad
    someone want to touch it
    because
    I'M A BAD GIRL
    at least tonight
    you know it won't lick itself
    and the game never ends
    I'M A BAD GIRL
    Duh-Duh!DA-DA!
    will she it? I mean him again?
    I'M A BAD GIRL!
    (1st part of rap-lyric)




    Submitted on 2006-04-23 10:56:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I'm not really catchin the rhythm here. You were kind of all over the place. I don't like to be one of them downer critics....but this was kind of messy. You must be young......I am assuming.

    You are definitely picking up on the rhyme part of hip-hop....but what it is missing is the heart. You are just putting a lot of words out there....if they rhyme you go with it....

    Try puttin more heart into the beat....when you do that you will be able to write on a larger horizon....more language....more complex thoughts....not just a ramble that rhymes.

    *shrugs*

    I'll keep readin your work....see what you're workin with.

    Li
    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      There's a couple of spelling errors and such but otherwise i would have to say right on...i think that the dashes aren't really needed but that's just me
    | Posted on 2006-04-23 00:00:00 | by Say what? | [ Reply to This ]
      god damn thats honest! cool, your just like one of the guys, you wanna get the cheap thrill when you need it,, but when it comes to falling in love screw them...its just gonna be a bunch of problems, like infedility, no respect, jealousy, psycho [censored]es or dudes throwing plates ect. this is how most girls think,,,but most of them dont have the balls to put it like this. we all have sexual needs, but at the end(when all the fun is over) we want a soulmate a life long partner="guys with small wangs".....(well girls do, not me im a guy). very bold......i admire that....god your such a heartbreaker.....but oh well thats what they get for being stupid.......well take care cool lyrics i wish i could rap but i cant.......

    locutus
    | Posted on 2006-07-23 00:00:00 | by locutus | [ Reply to This ]


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