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    dots Submission Name: '' TARZAN ''(Rap/crossover)dots
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    Author: ms.v
    Elite Ratio:    6.72 - 109/24/20
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Comedy
    Total Views: 899
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1011



    Description:
       (Rap/crossover)You know having fun, in the jungle of love.


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    dots '' TARZAN ''(Rap/crossover)dots
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    Now!here in the jungle
    were the ape swing
    to the man made music of a human-being
    with the call of the wild
    there dancing around in ape style
    dressed in his best
    with not a thing on his chest
    just a loin cloth to cover up the rest
    //come join in tap your feet to the beat
    of the jungle musicq //
    here in Africa
    were you can swing
    all day long to the beat of jungle-love songs
    being played on logs
    being played all night long
    were ripen fruit
    comes right off the vine
    dinning open at even time
    and after your belly is full
    you can get together with the other
    who want to dance around
    and act wild too
    can't you feel it?
    its the crazy of the jungle haze
    that makes your feet move
    get the blood flow-en through the vains
    its hot and insane
    its the jungle hip-hop of today
    OH! behave
    (1st part of rap-lyric)




    Submitted on 2006-04-23 12:59:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This sounds like a disney lyric, not a rap song! Oh, I suppose it could be whatever, but all I saw was a little cartoon gurilla singing away, banging leftover human relics!
    The rhythm is interesting, but it has character. I can't put my finger on it.

    Thanks for reviewing my 'Sea Skies' poem, and you are the first! Thanks again!
    ~Aetha
    | Posted on 2006-07-29 00:00:00 | by Aetha Daemon | [ Reply to This ]


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