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    dots Submission Name: feeling foreverdots

    Author: shootingstar
    ASL Info:    22/f/hell
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 102/120/21
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       um... as a result of being physically and emotionally abuse, i have trust issues.i don't reaaly know how to explain it any better. in the end i mentioned the love of my life, my bass. if there is someone reading this who can honestly decipher and relate to this one, please give me a shout. once more, this is me on paper.

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    dotsfeeling foreverdots

    Feel forever falling
    Wrap around broken fingertips
    Possibilities tremble and fade with the wind
    Beyond the reaches of today
    Diving to deep for fragile human bones
    The last surviving immortal

    And I feel forever falling
    Crashing my imaginary walls
    safe from nothing
    Alone and awake
    Even my super hero lies defeated
    Filled with emptiness
    Hate and fear turn grey.

    And I feel forever falling
    tempting fate, tied and trusting
    safe from nothing
    lose yourself to battered chords
    the blood spattered strings still smile

    play a piece of hell for those who shine
    If you feel forever falling

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