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    dots Submission Name: If you Believedots
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    Author: BrokenStream
    ASL Info:    019/f/NC
    Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 83/89/66
    Words: 255
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 881
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1515



    Description:
       Longing, and pain knowing that something so dear must come to an end


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    dotsIf you Believedots
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    I was just guessing
    you noticed
    I already stopped dancing
    The music is over
    What you hear is all in your mind
    We knew this would come
    The moment that would change everything
    Few steps back we would have thrown out everything

    How could I sleep at night
    knowing that you are slipping oh so far from my dreams?
    How could I even sing
    when you are the lyrics that propel
    all of my being?
    Could hear me, can you reach me
    Tell me if you believe

    Beyond the stars and the clouds is the one place we should be
    A dim ray can shed light
    on the only thing
    the biggest the hardest obstacle
    Through all this I decided that you are worth all the struggle

    How could I sleep at night
    knowing that you are slipping oh so far from my dreams?
    How could I even sing
    when you are the lyrics that propel
    all of my being?
    Could hear me, can you reach me
    Tell me if you believe

    Nothing here seems good enough
    No one can tell me what I need to hear
    Tell me is love still good enough?
    Can I ever hold everything I that I hold dear

    How could I sleep at night
    knowing that you are slipping oh so far from my dreams?
    How could I even sing
    when you are the lyrics that propel
    all of my being?
    Could hear me, can you reach me
    Tell me if you believe




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    ||| Comments |||
      I love everything about that.
    The wording is marvelous.
    It made me kind of sad, but thats how you know its good.

    Although I really like all of it, my favorite part is:

    "How could I sleep at night
    knowing that you are slipping oh so far from my dreams?
    How could I even sing
    when you are the lyrics that propel
    all of my being?"

    That is gorgeous.

    Very beautifully done

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem was awesome. i really loved it. there was just some spelling errors that mixed me up. but other than this was really good. it kind of sounded like a song. xoxo
    | Posted on 2006-04-23 00:00:00 | by myonlysalvation | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the sentiment. This piece is very relatable. A fact that makes it an easy read. I think it could be a bit more unique and have a more mature word choice, but overall I think this is a good write.
    LeAnna
    | Posted on 2006-04-23 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it, I can really relate and it goes perfect with a situation that I'm going through right now... Keep it up, and it's goin on my favs!
    | Posted on 2006-04-23 00:00:00 | by angeldust | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good poem. It is unique, but not too far out there. I hope that not all things must end. This person is lucky that you write this way about them, but they are loosing something, so, maybe not too lucky. Peace!
    | Posted on 2006-04-23 00:00:00 | by james110182 | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm guessing this is about a love on it's very last limbs. It was written very well, excellent choice of wording, and was an overall pleasure to read. Keep up the good work.

    Cai
    | Posted on 2006-04-23 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]


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