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    dots Submission Name: '' X-THAT BOX ''(rap/x-mas)dots
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    Author: ms.v
    Elite Ratio:    6.72 - 109/24/20
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Comedy
    Total Views: 1455
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1189



    Description:
       (rap/x-mas)guys playing to much video games, and girlfriends get violent.


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    dots'' X-THAT BOX ''(rap/x-mas)dots
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    GET A priest!
    get a bat
    pour holy water on that
    it the man toy from hell
    stop a girl from going to jail
    you pick-up that
    hand eye toy one more time
    tonight maybe your last game!
    Oh! help me
    she gone mad
    Sir!calm down
    now what happened?
    now start from the being
    well! I came home from work
    a long day of work
    and I sat down to eat
    something called dinner
    as I left the table to sit at the TV
    I think?I heard her say
    would you spend a little time with me
    I'm not sure its all so unclear
    as I was playing my video game
    she came bust-en
    in with a bat and a old man dress in black
    who started pouring water on my head
    that started to burn
    I screamed what the hell!
    that hurts Oh!my gamer
    If you love me you
    won't uses that, fun ken!bat
    OH! please send the cops
    she gone mad
    she killing!It!
    Oh! for the love of
    Oh! I think I'm going to faint!(thump)
    (girl)I had the best dream
    you think today
    (guy happy)I could play?




    Submitted on 2006-04-23 15:14:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I'm trying to catch your style yo....but I keep on gettin lost.

    I think that your punchlines would come across so much cleaner if you actually broke up the stanzas. Make it line for line instead of a paragraph.

    I love hip hop....but I just can't get a grasp on your rhythm and rhyme.

    Much love

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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