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    dots Submission Name: ''SUGAR & TOES''dots
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    Author: ms.v
    Elite Ratio:    6.72 - 109/24/20
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Comedy
    Total Views: 1039
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 770



    Description:
       BY:ms:v 7/17/05


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    dots''SUGAR & TOES''dots
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    THERE YOU RUN!
    THERE YOU GO
    CATCH A BOYFRIEND
    BY THE TOE MAKE SURE YOU
    DON'T LET A BOYFRIEND GO
    IF HE GIVE A MOAN HE GOOD TO GO
    GIVE HIM LOVE -LOVE
    WITH SUGAR & LACE
    THAT RIGHT,THAT A BIG SMILE
    ON HIS FACE
    CRINKLE UP HIS TOES
    MAKE HIS 3RD LEG GROW
    THAT RIGHT,RIDE HIM TILL HE SCREAM
    NO WOA!PUT A DUMB LOOK ON HIS FACE
    BOYFRIEND-BOYFRIEND UOE! WEE!
    YOU GOT WHAT A GIRL NEEDS
    TO THE LIP TO THE HIP
    YOU KNOW IT SO LONG I CAN'T SPEAK
    SO BIG TO THE NECKED EYE
    THINK A COULD CATCHES A RIDE
    (DEMON GIRL SOUND)
    AW! YES! IT ON!
    MAKE ME FEEL THE BURN
    OK! IT NOW YOUR TURN!
    (1st part of rap-lyric)




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