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    dots Submission Name: ''STANTA'S HO-HO-HOLE'S"(dots
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    Author: ms.v
    Elite Ratio:    6.72 - 109/24/20
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Comedy
    Total Views: 1151
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    Description:
       (rap/x-mas)


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    dots''STANTA'S HO-HO-HOLE'S"(dots
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    All you ho-ho hole's
    and a bottle of gin
    make old man Santa
    want to sin
    here I come down
    the line
    making all you
    my bad girl cry
    Santa!Santa!
    whats in your big red bag
    Well!
    all you girls good
    stand to the right
    Santa will show
    each of you
    a real jingle bell of a time
    here you go
    there it is
    you made Santa
    a happy man
    now who next?
    don't be shy
    Santa only
    bites sometime
    Yes!in deed
    I do have something
    for a girl who were double D's
    Wow!these could bring
    old Santa down on his knees
    yes soft but amazingly firm
    who want something
    made from peppermint candy
    it a sure garnish to be
    winterly and sexy
    it you hold it
    up between your knees
    Now!Now!girls Santa
    Gotas! to go
    he needs to see
    his other ho-ho-ho
    and all a good night
    and Santa love you hole's
    all the night!
    (1st part of rap-lyrics)




    Submitted on 2006-04-23 16:11:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      What about Mrs Santa Claus, can't she come and give us boys (hos or not) a good time at Christmas?
    I agree with Katana, this is an amusing and funny piece that tickles a jaded palette. I guess that the idea of Santa going up and down chimneys gives the old man a special taste. Thank you for the read.
    I suppose, from your English, that English is not your first language so you are to be congratulated on your work. Even so, I think that you must work at giving more accuracy to your writing so that your poems would be so much better. This may have been said before so forgive me if I have raised it again.
    Warm thoughts,

    Donald
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by siradrian | [ Reply to This ]
      It is very funny. But it needs to be edited in places and put in poem form. Other than that Santa and his hos is a funny and original subject.
    Katana
    | Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]


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