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    dots Submission Name: ''HANG-OVER JUICE''(RAP/CROSSOdots
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    Author: ms.v
    Elite Ratio:    6.72 - 109/24/20
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Comedy
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    Description:
       RAP/CROSSOVER lyric of drinking to much and how dumb that can be...


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    dots''HANG-OVER JUICE''(RAP/CROSSOdots
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    Wake-up
    with a hang-over
    pounding in my head
    sound so loud
    I wish you were dead
    Oh!not so loud
    can't you see
    I'm in need of soft sounds
    pretty please
    I can't even
    stand the sounds
    of a small mouse's little feet
    Oh!Oue! it feels like the ground
    is spinning around and around
    just let me stay
    here on the ground
    next to mother earth
    were I can try to find
    the rest of my peace mind
    drinky-winky was so good going down
    but when it change
    it makes a bad taste in my mouth
    should have stopped
    should have known better
    not to do
    so many rum shakers
    rumble-rumble in my little tummy
    makes a clean up for some body's mommy
    heres to my head
    heres to my tummy
    now open up and drink
    (1st part of lyric)




    Submitted on 2006-04-23 16:30:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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