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    dots Submission Name: Perfect In That f*cked Up Waydots
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    Author: darkened_soul
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 812/868/171
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       I wrote this the other night. It was after, hmmm, what's it called, a-a-a, realization. It was a long time coming, but, I'm glad it happened.


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    dotsPerfect In That f*cked Up Waydots
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    I tried to walk away
    But tears came to my eyes
    I realized at that moment
    I'd love you for all time.

    You're everything I never wanted
    Now everything I need
    You've grown to be a part of me
    You clear the air I breathe.

    Yet I can't seem to tell you
    I love you more than life
    I can't wait to get old with you
    I want to be your wife.

    I never thought I'd mean it
    But now, I know how I feel
    I can't imagine life without you
    This is definately, truly, real.

    I thought I stayed because of guilt
    Or 'cause you'd fall apart without me
    But when I walked away that day
    I realized what I couldn't see.

    It's not that you need me
    It's that I need you
    My world would crumble at your feet
    If you ever said "we're through"

    I've always been your world
    These days, I know you're mine to stay
    Although we fight, we love eachother
    We're perfect in that f*cked up way.




    Submitted on 2006-04-23 21:39:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow you just discribed my relationship. It is so backwords and fu#*ed up and it took me almost ruining it to realize just how much i needed him. Not want him and more than love him i need him and you discribed it perfectly. Very nice!
    AL
    | Posted on 2006-04-24 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      I can so relate to this , it happened to me , only Iíve realized what I had when it was too late , when it was really over . anyway , about your poem i like it , i like the laste line "we're perfect in a f-ed up way" , it's a great ending for this poem .
    have a nice day
    ~~Drakoniss~~
    | Posted on 2006-04-24 00:00:00 | by drakoniss | [ Reply to This ]
      that was good
    it was really sweet
    thats how it usualy happens
    kinda like you dont know what you got till its gone
    its kind of confuseing if you have never felt it before most ppl dont until they meet the right one
    i met mine soon to be 11 months ago
    when we first met i was confused as hell
    i was like wait a minuit this is something new
    makes you wonder how ppl can live without never knowing why they stay with that one person
    sometimes for years
    | Posted on 2006-04-23 00:00:00 | by Dark Romeo89 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hah... this piece was absolutely adorable. Yeah, sometimes people don't realize exactly how much they love someone and how much they need that other person for a very long time. I'm glad you've come to that realization, and I wish you luck in your relationship. And "we're perfect in a f-ed up way"... so true. Some of the most beautiful relationships don't follow the established conventions. Great write. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-04-23 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]
      one quick suggestion before i give my view because this one part just didn't make sense

    You're everything I never wanted
    Now everything I need
    You've grown to be a part of me
    You clear the air I breathe.

    shouldn't the line read you are the air I breathe?

    well now that thats over onto my views, I'm sure by now I've annoyed you beyond recognition with my constant reading of your poems and my feedback must also drive you crazy. but once again you've out done yourself this poem showed the true realization of loves power. though even if you don't feel the same, to know even once to have experienced love, no magtter on what terms you have. Its a true gift to have that experience within your mind and heart. I'm hoping for more poetry tio come.

    SAM
    | Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by speedrocketguit | [ Reply to This ]


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